THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASOSNS FOR IMIMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009

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The given pie charts demonstrate the information of reasons

majority

Correct article usage

the majority

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immigrates

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immigrated

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from

European

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Europe

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and

move

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moved

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to it in 2009. The units are measured in percentage.

Overall

Linking Words

, it can be seen that immigrants from

European

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Europe

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was

Correct subject-verb agreement

were

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most

Rephrase

mostly accompanied

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by accompany/family and the

rarely

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rare

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reason

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was for no

reason

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Additionally

Linking Words

, in the

remaining

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remaining,

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the vast

reason

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was

definite

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the definite

a definite

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job and lowest for no

reason

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. Looking at the figures of immigrants to

region

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the region

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, the motive was family/accompany account for 25%. Next to that was

definite

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a definite

the definite

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job for 23%. Study and other reasons had a similar number at 15% and the left with no

reason

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at 7% Turning to the remaining chart, there was a big pie accounted for 38%. Other reasons had

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dverage

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average

number at 23%. And accompany/family had approximately 15%. Look for job and study were at 13% and 7% respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

139 words

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THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASOSNS FOR IMIMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009

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