THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASOSNS FOR IMIMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009

THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASOSNS FOR IMIMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009
The given pie charts demonstrate the information of reasons
majority
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the majority
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immigrates
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immigrated
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from
European
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Europe
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and
move
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moved
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to it in 2009. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, it can be seen that immigrants from
European
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Europe
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was
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were
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most
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mostly accompanied
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by accompany/family and the
rarely
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rare
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reason
was for no
reason
.
Additionally
, in the
remaining
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remaining,
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the vast
reason
was
definite
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the definite
a definite
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job and lowest for no
reason
. Looking at the figures of immigrants to
region
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the region
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, the motive was family/accompany account for 25%. Next to that was
definite
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a definite
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job for 23%. Study and other reasons had a similar number at 15% and the left with no
reason
at 7% Turning to the remaining chart, there was a big pie accounted for 38%. Other reasons had
an
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a
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dverage
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average
number at 23%. And accompany/family had approximately 15%. Look for job and study were at 13% and 7% respectively.

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