THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASOSNS FOR IMIMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009

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majority

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the majority

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immigrates

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immigrated

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from

European

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Europe

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and

move

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to it in 2009. The units are measured in percentage.

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, it can be seen that immigrants from

European

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Europe

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was

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were

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most

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mostly accompanied

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by accompany/family and the

rarely

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reason

was for no

reason

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, in the

remaining

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the vast

reason

was

definite

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the definite

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job and lowest for no

reason

. Looking at the figures of immigrants to

region

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the region

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, the motive was family/accompany account for 25%. Next to that was

definite

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a definite

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job for 23%. Study and other reasons had a similar number at 15% and the left with no

reason

at 7% Turning to the remaining chart, there was a big pie accounted for 38%. Other reasons had

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dverage

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average

number at 23%. And accompany/family had approximately 15%. Look for job and study were at 13% and 7% respectively.

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THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASOSNS FOR IMIMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009

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