THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009.
The given pie charts demonstrate the information of reasons
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
immigrates
from Wrong verb form
immigrated
European
and Correct your spelling
Europe
move
to it during the year Wrong verb form
moved
of
2009. The units are measured in percentage.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, it can be seen that immigrants from European
Correct your spelling
Europe
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
most
by accompany or family and the Rephrase
mostly accompanied
rarely
Change the adverb
rare
reason
was for no reason
. Additionally
, in the remaining
the vast Add a comma
remaining,
reason
was definite
job and lowest for no Add an article
the definite
a definite
reason
.
Looking at the figures of immigrants to region
, the motive was family or accompany account for 25%. Next to that was Add an article
the region
definite
job for 23%. Study and other reasons had a similar number at 15% and the left with no Add an article
a definite
the definite
reason
at 7%
Turning to the remaining chart, there was a big pie accounted for 38% in 2009. Other reasons had an adverage
number at 23%. Correct your spelling
average
Moreover
, the percentage of accompany or family had
approximately 15%. Look for job and study were at 13% and 7% respectively.Verb problem
was
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