THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009.

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majority

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the majority

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immigrates

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immigrated

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from

European

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Europe

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and

move

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to it during the year

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2009. The units are measured in percentage.

Overall

, it can be seen that immigrants from

European

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Europe

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was

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were

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most

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mostly accompanied

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by accompany or family and the

rarely

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reason

was for no

reason

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remaining

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the vast

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the definite

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job and lowest for no

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. Looking at the figures of immigrants to

region

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the region

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, the motive was family or accompany account for 25%. Next to that was

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job for 23%. Study and other reasons had a similar number at 15% and the left with no

reason

at 7% Turning to the remaining chart, there was a big pie accounted for 38% in 2009. Other reasons had an

adverage

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average

number at 23%.

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, the percentage of accompany or family

had

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was

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approximately 15%. Look for job and study were at 13% and 7% respectively.

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migration trends
vibrant job market
foreign talent
educational pursuits
family reunification
seeking asylum
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dissatisfaction
specialized training
quality of life
economic factors
social factors
personal factors
push and pull factors
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THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009.

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many options. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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