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THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009.

THE PIE CHARTS SHOW THE REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS TO A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009 AND REASONS FOR IMMIGRANTS FROM A EUROPEAN COUNTRY IN 2009.
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The given pie charts demonstrate the information of reasons
majority
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the majority
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immigrates
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immigrated
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 from
European
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Europe
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 and
move
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moved
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 to it during the year
of
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apply
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2009. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, it can be seen that immigrants from
European
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Europe
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was
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were
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most
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mostly accompanied
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 by accompany or family and the
rarely
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reason
 was for no
reason
.
Additionally
, in the
remaining
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remaining,
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 the vast
reason
 was
definite
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the definite
a definite
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 job and lowest for no
reason
. Looking at the figures of immigrants to
region
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the region
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, the motive was family or accompany account for 25%. Next to that was
definite
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a definite
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 job for 23%. Study and other reasons had a similar number at 15% and the left with no
reason
 at 7% Turning to the remaining chart, there was a big pie accounted for 38% in 2009. Other reasons had an
adverage
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average
 number at 23%.
Moreover
, the percentage of accompany or family
had
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was
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 approximately 15%. Look for job and study were at 13% and 7% respectively.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration trends
  • vibrant job market
  • foreign talent
  • educational pursuits
  • family reunification
  • seeking asylum
  • safe haven
  • dissatisfaction
  • specialized training
  • quality of life
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • personal factors
  • push and pull factors
  • nuanced understanding
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