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Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think this is a positive or negative social development?

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One of the consequences of globalization is that even though there are more humans on the earth, the number of
languages
 spoken is decreasing. As nomadic
people
 and small tribes are assimilated into the wider population, and as powerful
languages
 are increasingly taught in schools, it seems likely that in future all
people
 will speak the same
language
. I don’t believe
this
 is a terrible thing, but it is not without its problems. On the surface, it may seem as though the loss of
languages
 is inherently negative. Our
language
 is a part of our cultural identity, and without it,
people
 may feel a sense of loss.
For example
, some populations whose traditional
language
 is dying out will lose their ancient stories and traditions, and feel that they are now no different from other groups of
people
.
This
 problem is exacerbated by the fact that dominant cultures, whose
languages
 are spreading throughout the world, maintain their cultural traditions.
However
,
although
 there are clearly some unfortunate side effects of
this
 aspect of globalization, there are so many benefits that they outweigh the negatives. For one thing, the dominance of major
languages
 like English ensures an increased level of literacy throughout populations where previously there were only oral
languages
 or very limited written materials.
While
 the loss of cultural artefacts is regrettable, the rise of literacy increases standards of living, and
this
 is more important. In conclusion, there are some undeniably negative consequences of a global
language
;
however
, the increase in literacy levels is an example of a benefit to humanity that vastly outweighs any imaginable drawback.
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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples or evidence to support your points. For instance, mention specific cultures or languages that are at risk of dying out. This will strengthen your argument and provide a clearer picture to the reader.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. While your essay is quite cohesive, adding a few more transitional phrases can enhance the overall flow. For example, you might start your paragraph on benefits with 'On the other hand' or 'Conversely' to show contrast with the previous paragraph about negatives.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction effectively sets up the topic and outlines your stance, making it clear to the reader what will be discussed in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion is strong and provides a clear summary of your main points, reinforcing your argument well.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a logical flow of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. Each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhanced
  • streamlining
  • diverse cultures
  • accelerate
  • exchange of information
  • erosion
  • linguistic diversity
  • dominance
  • unequal power dynamics
  • marginalizing
  • reinforce
  • economic benefits
  • reduced translation
  • diplomacy
  • acquisition
  • exacerbating
  • social inequalities
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