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The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the Monarch butterfly's life
cycle
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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cycle
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the cycle
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 contains
of
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apply
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four stages which
begins
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begin
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 with mating and laying
egg
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an egg
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 which is called the egg stage and ends with migration to
south
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the south
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 part which is known as the adult phase.
This
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 is the
cycle
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 which continues again and again.
Firstly
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,
insect
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the insect
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 migrates to
north
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the north
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 where it mates and lays an egg on the weed,
then
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 after being on the milkweed for two weeks it turns into
newly
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a newly
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 hatched larva.
Hence
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 the larva stage starts: it becomes there as a caterpillar,
then
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 it attaches into a larva.
In addition
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, after 10 days it is chrysalises.
Secondly
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, at the pupal
stage
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stage,
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 it is
emeregencies
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emergencies
emergence
 as a
6 month
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6-month
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 adult and moves to the south side.
Then
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cycle
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the cycle
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 begins again and ends the same.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cycle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • Monarch butterfly
  • eggs
  • milkweed plants
  • larvae
  • caterpillars
  • feed
  • chrysalis
  • pupa
  • metamorphosis
  • emerge
  • adult butterfly
  • repeat
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