The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014. Summariseinformation by selecting and reporting the main features, andamake comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014. Summariseinformation by selecting and reporting the main features, andamake comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the widespread issue of corpulency
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males and females in the age groups between 12 and 19 by ethnicity, in the US from 2004 to 2014
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, it can be seen that most ethnic groups suffered from obesity in the year of 2014,
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the opposite was true
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2004.
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, non-hispanic black ethnicity experienced a myriad number of fat,
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a small portion of
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tendency was witnessed by
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white residents. Looking at 2014, when the prevalence of obesity was observed the most. In terms of
non-hispanic
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the non-hispanic
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black group, 29% of dwellers were affected by
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epidemic
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epidemic
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