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The pie charts below show exports between the US and Vietnam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show exports between the US and Vietnam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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pie chart illustrates information about how much
exports
 between the US and
Vietnam
 in six types of
goods
.
Overall
, it can clearly seen that the size
of
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the of
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value
 US
export
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exports
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 is larger than
Vietnam
export
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exports
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. Aircraft parts
repesent
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represent
the
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a
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 big part of
exports
 to
Vietnam
 from
US
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the US
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,
while
 coffee has the majority of part of
exports
 to
US
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the US
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 from
Vietnam
.
According to
 what is shown, the size of
exports
 to
Vietnam
 is 171$
million
.A
thrid
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third
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 of exported
goods
is
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are
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 aircraft parts with
value
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a value
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 of 72 $
million
.Machinery
prodcts
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products
 account 30.5 $
million
 and the
value
 of fertiliser
goods
 is 16.5 $
million
. 12 $
million
 is
value
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the value
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 of
expoted
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exported
exposed
 cotton. The lowest
value
 is cass,it
reprsents
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represents
 only 6 $
million
 and other
goods
makes
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make
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 up 35 $
million
.
However
, the
value
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of Vietnam
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Vietnam
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Vietnam's
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exports
 to
US
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the US
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 is 48 $
million
.
The
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A
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 big part of
this
 export for coffee with
value
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the value
a value
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 of 23 $
million
. Around a third of products for fruit and
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and A quarter for seafood, rice, garments,and
other
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others
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, vietnam, goods, value, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • import/export balance
  • sector
  • percentage
  • relative importance
  • comparative analysis
  • similarities and differences
  • noteworthy
  • primary sector
  • secondary sector
  • contribute
  • overall export profile
  • main features
  • summarize
  • context
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