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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the current blueprint of Central
Library
along with
 its plan two decades ago.
Overall
, in the 20-year
period
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period,
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 the
library
 has removed a few services and added new ones. Today, the
library
 is based on self-service management,
hence
 the removal of the enquiry desk that was situated
in
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on
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 the right of the entrance. Now, there is a café in that place, and self-service machines are located opposite the café. Information regarding the
library
 can be taken
in
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at
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 the information desk
that is
 between the machines and the section for adult fiction books.
Lecture
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The lecture
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room
 is in the
top- right
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 corner of the
library
. As one enters,
they
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one
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 can find a computer
room
 towards the left. The place for seating is relocated to a
room
that is
 in the top-left of the
library
.
This
room
 occupies an area for storytelling events and a shelf for children’s fictional books. The rest of the books are arranged between
this
room
 and the computer
room
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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