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A young person will start work at your office next month to gain work experience. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter ▪️Inform him/her about the work that needs to be done at the office; ▪️Explain what he/she is supposed to do on the first day; ▪️Suggest what he/she should bring to work

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to inform you about the routes and requirements pertinent to your internship period starting next month. My Name is John Smith and I am your direct manager at the company that you have applied for an internship program.
First,
your responsibilities in
this
 position include participating in the product development team meeting and trying to find a way to align your skills and capabilities
according to
 the latest standards of software development. On the first day of your work, you don't have to be stressed out. All you have to do is get to know your new colleagues, be trained about the rudimentary facets of our software application, the installation method and fill out some forms and sign your contract. Because the first day of your presence is supposed to be a part of your onboarding program, there is no need to bring anything special with you. Just keep in
your
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mind to bring your identification documents,
your
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 referral letter and It is
also
 highly recommended to bring your laptop if you have one. I am looking forward to meeting you in our team. Regards, John Smith
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task achievement
Consider ensuring consistency in tense usage, particularly between past and future tenses. For instance, 'you don't have to be stressed out' can be rephrased to maintain a formal tone.
coherence cohesion
It would be helpful to break down long sentences into shorter ones for clarity and easier comprehension. For example, 'Just keep in your mind...' sentence can be simplified.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses all three task requirements - informing about the work, explaining first day tasks, and suggesting what to bring.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is mostly formal and appropriate for professional communication.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is well-maintained, with each paragraph dealing with a single idea.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used and lend a professional touch to the letter.
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