Somepeople are ofthe opinion that ther should be a car free day once every month,there will be only public transport for that day .What are the advantages and disadvantages discuss both

At present,air pollution is becoming a major issue in the world.Many people argue that there should be a car-free day once a month
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when only public transport should be allowed on the roads.There
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a number of advantages that favour
this
statement but
also
have some disadvantages .
This
essay will discuss both.
Firstly
,with the advancement of technology, more individuals prefer to own their own cars.
Moreover
, increasing competition between car companies,and
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of more budget-friendly schemes ,
such
as trends of leasing a car or easy payment instalments attract people to buy private vehicles,which leads to more loads on roads and causes congestion .
Furthermore
,carbon emissions from increased traffic is a hazard.
This
can be controlled by making strict rules ,
such
as a carbon-free day once every month,it promotes public transit and creates equity between different groups of society .
On the other hand
,communities are used to private convince and they are comfortable travelling by their own cars.If
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make it compulsory for everyone to travel by public transport ,it will overburden the buses or trains and regular commuters will face more difficulties.
Secondly
,in case of any emergency, where it is not possible to access local transportation ,
for example
,if someone has
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arrest ,and authorities
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allow to use any private vehicle for a specific day ,it would be detrimental.
To conclude
, even though making
such
policies is beneficial for the nation,there will be some relaxation in emergency situations.So,
such
rules are more environmentally friendly and have more positive effects on society
as well as
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Air pollution
  • Climate change
  • Physical activity
  • Public health
  • Traffic congestion
  • Commutes
  • Social interaction
  • Sense of community
  • Local businesses
  • Car-dependent
  • Revenue
  • Implementation challenges
  • Administrative costs
  • Resistance
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