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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates information about how the children travelled to and from school in the years 1990 and 2010 with different modes of transport. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can
by
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be
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 clearly seen that the highest proportion of
number of
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apply
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trips in
the
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1990 was by walking and in 2010 was by car passenger,
while
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 the lowest
proprtion
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proportion
 in 2010 was by cycling and in 1990 by car passenger.
According to
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 what is shown in the chart the number of trips using car passengers grew from 4.2
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 to 11
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, in the author hand walking dropped by 6.2
m
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also
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 cycling by 4
m
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.
However
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 the change over 20 years in different modes of transport was noteworthy, only using bus it wasn't a huge tare between them to sum up, we could say the total
nuber
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number
 of treps in 1990 it 34.4
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,
in
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 2010 the total number
29
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m
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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