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Recycling has decreased in the last few years. Why do think that is? What can be done to improve this?

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Recycling, once a novel concept 30 years ago, has now evolved into an urgent necessity for our environment. The consequences of ignoring recycling in the coming years will not only impact our future but
also
 that of the next generation. The key to addressing
this
 issue lies in three crucial factors: government policy, culture, and economic effect. By maximizing these factors, we can pave the way for a more sustainable and healthier world.
Firstly
, Governments all over the world have varying policies for their environmental goals.
For example
, not supporting clean energy might lead to less money to recycle rubbish.
Also
, not having punishment could cause
people
 not to make the right choice.
Secondly
, culture is another reason why recycling is not popular. In some countries, it may not be cool to do, especially with teenagers.
People
 could be blinded by misinformation about recycling. Social media can be used to tell
people
 about the benefits of saving our world. Economic disparities can significantly influence a country's recycling capabilities. A lack of resources can hinder the reuse of materials, and poorer countries may struggle to match the recycling rates of wealthier nations. The absence of taxes on waste can
also
 discourage recycling. It's evident that global cooperation and support are essential for improving recycling rates worldwide. In conclusion, recycling is an essential part of modern life. Improving government policies, educating
people
 about the benefits of clean energy, and supporting other poor countries will improve everyone's lives.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples and case studies to support your points. For example, mention specific government policies that have been successful or unsuccessful in other countries.
coherence cohesion
Work on linking your paragraphs better. Use transitional phrases to ensure a smoother flow between sections. For example, use phrases like 'In addition to government policy...' or 'Moreover, cultural factors...'
task achievement
The introduction is strong and clearly sets the stage for discussing the importance of recycling.
coherence cohesion
The essay features a clear and logical structure with distinct paragraphs for government policies, cultural factors, and economic impacts.

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