The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power.
The diagram illustrates the process of making drinking
water
by solar power. Looking from an overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that this
process is complex with various materials which begin with solar energy and culminate with finished products are
ready to be used.
Correct pronoun usage
that are
To begin
with
the solar panel absorbs the sunlight converting it into electricity by the converted. After that, electricity powers provided a wide range of energy for a pump located below the underground well in order to draw Add a comma
with,
water
up.
In the nest stage, water
is pumped into the water
tank to store and prepare for further
processing. After
this
step is complete, the stored water
undergoes purification to ensure the quality of water
. Correct article usage
the water
Additionally
, the water
slows through a tube from the water
tank to a movable container. Finally
, a tap is attached to the tube to be more convenient to collect clean water
which can be used for a wide range of purposes such
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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