The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of Americans in two of the years.
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The bar charts illustrate how many people were married and divorced in the USA from 1970 until 2000, and the family status of adults in America in those years.
First,
interesting to see that the
number
of marriages decreased from 2.5 million to 2 million during the presented period,
while
divorces after slight fluctuation remained at the same level of 1 million people.
Secondly
, in terms of marital status, the majority of Americans are married,
however
, from 1970 to 2000, their
number
decreased from 70% to 60%.
In addition
,
number
of divorced people tripled from roughly 3% in 1970 to around 9% in 2000.
Finally
, the
number
of never-married increased from 1.5 in
ten
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10
to 2 in
ten
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10
during the presented thirteen years, albeit widowed adults stable accounted for slightly less than 10% of the total population, which is half, compared to never-married Americans.
Overall
, in the USA in the period from 1970 until 2000, the
number
of marriages decreased,
however
still presented the main choice of relationships,
while
divorces increased dramatically and the
number
of never-married increased moderately.
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