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The chart and table below give information about tourists at particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting any reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting any reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.
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The pie chart and table compare data on
travelers
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 who are at specific tourist
centers
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centres
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 in Australia. As the pie chart reveals information about the proportions of tourists by region of origin, the highest percentage of
travelers
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travellers
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 were Europeans and people who lived in the USA, at 37% and 35%, respectively. The figures for individuals who
traveled
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 were 10% Asians, which was lower than the proportions of people from other countries, at 80%. With reference to the table's information, Asian tourists spent 7
days
traveling
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 at the 5-star hotel, which was the most prominent accommodation, and their main activity was sightseeing. In terms of European vacations, they stayed 16
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 at camping and caravan sites, which were the most well-known places to visit, and either swimming or sunbathing was their main activity. Regarding American tourists, they stayed 14
days
 at the 4-star hotel, which was the best-known residence for them, and sightseeing was their common activity. As for visitors from other regions, they spent 10
days
 mostly at camping and caravan sites, and their common sport was surfing.
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