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the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
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The table shows the figures
about
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 the proportion of
the
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money
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 spent on different types of
consumptions
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consumption
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 in five countries in 2002. There is an obvious fact that Turkey was
the
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first ranked in terms of consumed
money
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 for both leisure time and education and eating, drinking and smoking.
By contrast
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, residents in Sweden
had
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spent the least
money
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for
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on
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 food, drinks and tobacco and
wearing
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clothing
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. In Turkey, roughly 32
percent
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per cent
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 of the
people
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’s budget went
for
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 food, drinks and smoking.
Similarly
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, Ireland is in the second order,
people
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 who lived there spent nearly 29
percent
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per cent
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for
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 that.
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, these
people
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 spent only approximately 2
percent
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per cent
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 of their
money
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to
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 their education and spare time.
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, Italian citizens allotted by far the highest rate of their budget (9 %) to
the
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clothing. The Irish, Spanish and Turkish
people
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 spent nearly the same proportion of
money
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 (6%) on
the
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clothing. Swedish
people
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 pay a little less for that.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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