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The table shows spending rate of the government on training and participation rate of teenagers in five different nations in 2002.

The table shows spending rate of the government on training and participation rate of teenagers in five different nations in 2002.
The table provides a comparison of the expenditure
rate
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 of the
government
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 on
education
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 and training and
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participation
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the participation
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rate
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 of 18-24 year olds in the same in five nations in the year 2002.
Overall
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,
Poland
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 and
Slovenia
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 had the highest percentage of involvement
rate
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 (44% and 40% cumulatively),
while
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Poland
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 (5%) and the Czech Republic (9%) had the significantly lowest percentage of spending
rate
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 that was involved by the
government
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. In 2002,
Slovenia
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 allocated the highest proportion of
government
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 spending to
education
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 and training, at 25%.
Poland
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's spending
rate
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 was significantly lower at only 5% of
Slovenia
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's
rate
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. Romania and the Czech Republic both allocated 10% and 9% of their
government
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 expenditures to
education
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 and training, respectively. Hungary's spending
rate
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 surpassed Romania's by 3%. Among the given countries,
Poland
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 had the highest
participation
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rate
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 of 18-24 year olds in
education
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 and training, at 44%.
Slovenia
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's
participation
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rate
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 was lower at 40%. Hungary's
participation
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rate
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 was 6% less than
Slovenia
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's, at 34%. The Czech Republic's
participation
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rate
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 was 27%,
while
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 Romania's was the lowest at 23%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, government, education, participation, poland, slovenia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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