The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of closures and openings of the markets in one nation over
seven-year
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period.
Overall
, it is evident that both trends experienced some fluctuations and the closures had a dramatic fall in the middle of
era
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the era
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.
According to
the data, at the outset of the period, the
number
of shops that
was
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were
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opended
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opened
in the area was approximately 8500,
while
, the closure shops were around 6200. In 2012, the
number
of openings decreased significantly and reached 4000,
however
, it saw
a
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moderate growth until 2014.
In contrast
, the closures fluctuated and stood
on
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at
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the same
number
of
opening
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openings
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in 2014, precisely 6000. By 2015, the
number
of markets had dropped dramatically to less than 1000,
and
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followed by a
steebly
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steady
steeply
steely
rise to 5000 and maintained the same from 2016 to 2018.
Whereas
, the openings followed
a downward trends
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a downward trend
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and
stabled
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stayed
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on
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at
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4000 for two years, and saw a slight decrease
about
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of about
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1000, in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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