In many countries, there is a shortage of housing due to growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the countryside. Other argue for the regeneration of the cities. What are the advantages and Disadvantages of building new towns in the countryside?

Numerous nations are facing
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of housing
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result
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of
rapid
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the rapid
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growth of
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population
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are arguing whether building new
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in suburban areas or regenerating the existing
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would be better for the future. I believe optimizing
countryside
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will give immediate solutions for the urgency
although
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local
people
from the area. Bringing infrastructural development to the countryside will be faster compared to turning the city into a regenerative one. Peripheral areas of the city can easily turned into a new town within around 12-24 months.
On the other hand
, rebuilding the existing cities to provide more houses for
people
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time. Especially, the government need to create a new modelling so that the development would not cause more
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before actually making any changes,
for example
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water for more
people
-concentrated
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will be challenging.
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result
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, the regenerating will take about 3-5 years approximately. Constructing new buildings will
also
bring discomfort within the
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. The noises coming from
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construction
projects
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always
such
a pain in the neck.
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the main reason why
people
from
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the countryside
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would reject any proposal
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developing their areas. Without the permission, the plan will not run smoothly. In conclusion, adding new towns outside the cities can give faster
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for housing problems and
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another social problem at the same time. But any changes will always bring discomfort, the task would be how to
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make
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the progress in a seamless way.
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  • overcrowded cities
  • distribute the population evenly
  • congestion
  • natural surroundings
  • quality of air
  • well-being
  • infrastructure
  • investment
  • resource-intensive
  • environmental impact
  • agricultural land
  • natural habitats
  • wildlife
  • ecosystems
  • rural economy
  • job opportunities
  • rural depopulation
  • social disruption
  • urban design
  • sustainable
  • livable towns
  • urban sprawl
  • inefficient land use
  • dependency on cars
  • modern urban design principles
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