The pie charts below show the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular UK University in 1987 and 2007.
The charts illustrate how many
school
leavers chose to study
at a certain university
in the UK between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
, there was an increase in the proportion of young people choosing to study
at this
school
because it provided suitable courses and it was close to their home, while
the figures for those opting for this
school
owing to its quality of resources and teaching, and its physical and social activities declined. In addition
, the majority of students chose to study
in the examined school
because of its degree courses in both years.
The percentage of students saying that they chose to study
in the surveyed school
because of its courses started at 35%, after which it saw a slight increase to 37%. Meanwhile, the figure for those whose house was close to their school
grew significantly from 10% to 21%. 21% of the students placed more emphasis on the quality of the resources of the school
in 1987, with a subsequent decline to 17% in 2007. In the meanwhile, the figures for undergraduates whose reason for enrollment was related to the quality of teaching and extra curricular
activities halved to 8% and 9% respectively.Correct your spelling
extracurricular
Submitted by anhnguyen270407 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, study with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼