The pie charts below show the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular UK University in 1987 and 2007.

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The charts illustrate how many

school

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leavers chose to

study

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at a certain university in the UK between 1987 and 2007.

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, there was an increase in the proportion of young people choosing to

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this

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school

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because it provided suitable courses and it was close to their home,

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the figures for those opting for

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school

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owing to its quality of resources and teaching, and its physical and social activities declined.

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, the majority of students chose to

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in the examined

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because of its degree courses in both years. The percentage of students saying that they chose to

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in the surveyed

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because of its courses started at 35%, after which it saw a slight increase to 37%. Meanwhile, the figure for those whose house was close to their

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grew significantly from 10% to 21%. 21% of the students placed more emphasis on the quality of the resources of the

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in 1987, with a subsequent decline to 17% in 2007. In the meanwhile, the figures for undergraduates whose reason for enrollment was related to the quality of teaching and

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activities halved to 8% and 9% respectively.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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6 paragraphs

197 words

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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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"Some people believe that online education provides significant benefits, while others think it leads to a loss of important social interactions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.