The pie charts below show the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular UK University in 1987 and 2007.

The pie charts below show the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular UK University in 1987 and 2007.
The charts illustrate how many
school
leavers chose to
study
at a certain university in the UK between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
, there was an increase in the proportion of young people choosing to
study
at
this
school
because it provided suitable courses and it was close to their home,
while
the figures for those opting for
this
school
owing to its quality of resources and teaching, and its physical and social activities declined.
In addition
, the majority of students chose to
study
in the examined
school
because of its degree courses in both years. The percentage of students saying that they chose to
study
in the surveyed
school
because of its courses started at 35%, after which it saw a slight increase to 37%. Meanwhile, the figure for those whose house was close to their
school
grew significantly from 10% to 21%. 21% of the students placed more emphasis on the quality of the resources of the
school
in 1987, with a subsequent decline to 17% in 2007. In the meanwhile, the figures for undergraduates whose reason for enrollment was related to the quality of teaching and
extra curricular
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activities halved to 8% and 9% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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