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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of four destinations visited by three
groups
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 in Canada.
Overall
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, cinema is the most popular place for both new
migrants
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 born in English-speaking nations and those born in Canada
while
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 new
migrants
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 born in other countries visit the library more often than any other
groups
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.
In contrast
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, theatre is the least common choice for all three
groups
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. Starting with the popular spots for new
migrants
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 born in English-speaking countries and people born in Canada, cinema accounts for the largest with about 65% and 70% respectively.
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, their second favourite spot is the zoo with 50% and just above 40% each. Regarding the rates of libraries, they are slightly lower than them, sharing 40% or less and the lowest proportion of these two
groups
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 of people go to theatre with below 30%. Turning to the graph for new
migrants
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 born in non-English-speaking countries, the library is the favourite place with approximately 55%, which is followed by the cinema with 50%.
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 a lower percentage of people visit zoos, it is still an attractive place with just above 30%, which is almost three times as much as theatres.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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