The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The supplied bar chart illustrates how many
people
were employed in five various types of occupation in
a
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area which is certain in
Australia
in 2001 and 2008. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest amount of
population
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the population
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were hired in sales
position
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in
Australia
.
However
,the companies did not prefer to employ
people
as
Farmes
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farms
over the period. In 2008,the average of
people
who were chosen to
sale
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was just over 160000 in
Australia
.(Which was the highest rate of
employing
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employment
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over the whole year),just ahead of
population
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the population
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who were selected for sales (150000
people
)in
Australia
in 2001.
Moreover
,hiring
people
for accounting in
Australia
in 2001 was as popular as employing in 2008 with roughly 60000 persons.
In contrast
,
the
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employers did not tend to hire workers for Farming with 20000
people
in
Australia
in both years(2001 and 2008).
in addition
,the average
of
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population who were chosen for Computing and Nursing was just around
of
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50000 in the country in 2001 and approximately 60000 in
Australia
in 2008,respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • workforce
  • sector
  • industry
  • agriculture
  • services
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • notable increases/decreases
  • statistical data
  • regional employment patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • percentage points
  • employment rate
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