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The bar chart shows the number of homes, each worth 5 million dollars or more, sold in eight cities.

The bar chart shows the number of homes, each worth 5 million dollars or more, sold in eight cities.
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The given chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
houses
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 which were bought with
the
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a
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 price of 5 million dollars
of
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or
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 higher in 2009 and 2014. Generally speaking,
London
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 was the
city
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 that sold the most
houses
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 during 2014
while
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 the opposite side was true for Dubai in the same year.
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,
houses
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 in New York
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city
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 which were sold increased rapidly in 2014, much more than
the
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in the
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 past year. In 2009, the
city
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 that had the most
houses
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 sold was
London
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 with 523.
This
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 was followed by Dubai, whose
houses
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bought
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were bought
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 with only 12.
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London
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 was New York
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city
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City
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 with 476
houses
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, a quite large number at that time. Among these
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 cities, Singapore had the lowest
position
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, 107
houses
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 were sold in 2009.
On the other hand
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, among Asian cities, Hong Kong was on top with 388
houses
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, leading to the third
position
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 of
this
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 chart. Turning to the data in 2014,
London
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 still had the highest
position
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 with 1638
houses
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 bought by citizens, in comparison to the number in 2009. The second
position
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 was the same
with
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as
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 New York,
796
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with 796
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houses
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. In terms of Asia, Hong Kong
was
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seemed an ideal
city
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 to have
an
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apply
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accommodation.
By
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contrast
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contrast,
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 was Dubai
with
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apply
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46
houses
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were
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apply
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sold at the same time.
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