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In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produce locally Why people buy imported food ? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food ?

#countries #people #food
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In many nations nowadays, there are more
people
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prefer
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who prefer
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 imported
food
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than
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to
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 local
food
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, which derives from the better
quality
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 of foreign
food
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.
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,
this
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 can be tackled by improving the
quality
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 control of local
food
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. It is vital
understand
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 that the
quality
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 of
food
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 in developed
countrues
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countries
 is better than
food
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 in less developed nations.
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, residents in
that
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those
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 countries
tends
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 to buy
food
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 which was imported
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 the belief that foreign
food
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 is better.
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, more and more
people
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 choose to buy overseas
food
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instead
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 of native ones.
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, there are a lot of Vietnamese
people
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 who like apples from America or grapes from Japan because these
agricutural
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agricultural
products
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 from Vietnam
is
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are
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 not as good as the foreign ones.
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, the issue can be solved by the government to increase the strictness of the
quality
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 control in native
products
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.
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meansthat
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means that
 the
quality
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 of
food
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 from
local
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locals
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 can catch up with the
quality
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 of overseas
food
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 in the future.
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, there will be more and more
people
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believe
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who believe
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 in
the
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apply
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native
products
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 and choose them to consume
instead
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 of imported
food
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.
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, the European market has upgraded
their
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its
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proocess
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process
 in controlling the
quality
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 of the production, and
this
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 action made them become one of the most bustle
market
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markets
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 in
impoting
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importing
imposing
 and consuming local
food
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. In conclusion, there are more
people
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choose
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who choose
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 to consume foreign
products
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due to
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its
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their
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quality
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.
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, by enhancing the procedures of checking the
food
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quality
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, the customers may go for the local choice.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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