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The charts below show average age of men and women retired from work in 7 countries in 2004 and 2008.

The charts below show average age of men and women retired from work in 7 countries in 2004 and 2008.
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The bar graphs illustrate the information about the average of the male and female’s
age
 retiring in 7 different nations between 2004 and 2008.
This
 figure is measured in
year
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years
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 old(
YO
).
Overall
, in
both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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, the average
age
 of people in 2004
were
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was
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 lower than the average
age
 of people in 2008 with the exception of Italy.
In addition
,
Sweden
 is a country which has the oldest average retirement
age
both
in
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male and female. Looking at the men’s chart, we can clearly see that Germany and Denmark had the same trend which in 2008 saw a higher
age
 by 1
YO
 (60 and 61 in Germany; 59 and 60 in Denmark). France,
UK
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the UK
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Sweden
got
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the
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a
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 similar tendency which in 2004 witnessed a lower
by
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of
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 nearly 0.5
YO
.
Additionally
,
Sweden
 has the highest average
age
 in
both
 2004 and 2008
which
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at 63
YO
 and nearly 64
YO
. In Italy, there was
a
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the
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 same data in
both
 sexes at 58
YO
. Turning back to the women’s chart, it can be seen that Germany, Denmark, France and Italy were the four nations which had average
age
 under 60
YO
. The others
such
 as
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
Sweden
 and
UK
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the UK
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 were the countries which had higher 60
YO
 in
both
 sexes and in
both
 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, yo, both, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average age
  • retirement
  • comparative analysis
  • trend
  • significant
  • age gap
  • correlation
  • life expectancy
  • pension policies
  • societal norms
  • economic conditions
  • regions
  • investigation
  • findings
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