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Some people believe that it is better for students learning language in small classes. Other think the number of people in the classes does not matter. Discuss both of view and give your own opinion.

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It is important to teach
language
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 in any educational system.
Although
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 some
people
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 say that
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 classes would be small and
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 a few number of
students
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, others believe that the number of
students
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 is not important. On the one hand, many
people
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 want to learn a new
language
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 in small classes with a few numbers of
students
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 because the teacher can pay attention to every student and all
students
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 can learn a new
language
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 easily. It has a good effect teaching and learning process.
Language
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 teaching mainly depends on long learning and after-class practices.
Students
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 should
study
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 hard at home to learn new vocabulary by heart
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grammar exercises.
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, they communicate with their classmates or
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 who know well the
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 for better conversation. Of course, the
students
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 do not practice the
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 outside of school , they can not learn even in small classes. So school is not the perfect place to practice the
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,
therefore
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 the size of the class does not influence the
students
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.
On the other hand
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, another group of
people
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 think that the number of
students
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 does not matter and it is not influenced to learning the
language
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.
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Studying
 with a lot of
students
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 would be better because they can communicate with each other
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learn new ideas, and learn new information.
Students
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 who really want to learn a new
language
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 can
study
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 any place. In conclusion, it is not necessary to teach in a small class because the most important thing is
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 every day and everywhere. It can help
students
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 develop their
language
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 skills.
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