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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps depict the changes which have taken place in the central library over twenty years.
Overall
, it is evident that the main layout remains
untouch
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untouched
, but some facilities have been added. The most outstanding feature is made in the
children
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children's
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 section. There used to be computers, games and videos,
and
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but
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 now the
room
 has been extended and two
sofa
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 have been added for storytelling events. The computer
room
 was transferred to the left of the main
enterance
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entrance
 and replaced by the former reading
room
, with a new door
head
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heading
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 to the
enterance
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entrance
 corridor. All
refrence
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reference
books
 were placed in the corridor between these two rooms.
Moreover
, the enquiry desk, which was located to the right of the entry, has been converted
to
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the
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a
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 coffee shop. A new information desk has been installed, on the top of the café,
along with
 three
self-sevice
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self-service
 machines. The lecture
room
 was situated
instead
 of
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the
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former children’s
books
room
.
In addition
, the
adults
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adult's
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 fiction
books
 section was placed next to the information desk and the
non- fiction
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books
 were removed. As we can see, the tables and chairs, which were located in the main corridor,
where
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were
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 totally removed.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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