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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two maps
depicts
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depict
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 the Norbiton industrial
area
 and planned development in the
future
. It is clear from the maps that
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the
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industrial
area
 will
convert
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be converted
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to
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into
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housing
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a housing
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area
 in the
future
.
According to
 what is shown, all factories will
destruct
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destroy
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 in the planned
future
. In the
future
, addition of street will built across the river with
T-shape
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a T-shape
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also
 street will
construct
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be constructed
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 in the Southern of
mape
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the mape
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.
moreover
, many houses will built in
the
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apply
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diffrent
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different
 areas.
Further
, many
faclties
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facilities
 will be established
to
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for
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 people living there easily
sach
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such
 as shops, medical
centre
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centres
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, schools and
playground
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playgrounds
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. From these maps, the farmland will replaced from southern to western the
area
. To
sun
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sum
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 up, we could say that
this
area
 will
development
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develop
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to
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into
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 be
living
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a living
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area
 for many people
instead
 of
industrial
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an industrial
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area
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, future with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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