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the table and pie show the total value and sources of fish imports to the UK from 1990 to 2000.Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the table and pie show the total value and sources of fish imports to the UK from 1990 to 2000.Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs illustrate the trade scale and
import
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 sources in terms of
fish
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 in Britain during the given decade. The exporting countries include Canada, Japan and other countries. In general, the total amount of
fish
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import
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 business grew strongly/sharply and consistently/continuously.
Furthermore
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/Extraordinarily, compared with the first five
years
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, it is worth noting that the figure saw a remarkable surge/soar from 7.05 billion pounds to 10.5 billion pounds in the second five
years
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. Moving on to the source states of
fish
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import
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, there was a mild/minor/stable decline in Canada between ten
years
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 from about/approximate
one third
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one-third
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 to less than a quarter.
In contrast
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,
Japan’
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Japan’s
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 share occupied a fifth at the beginning.
Besides
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, the percentage/proportion of Japan reached its peak(more than a third) after experiencing a fluctuation.
In addition
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, not
did
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 the portion of other nations owning market shares
goes
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 up significantly, but it
also
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 climbed
a top
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atop
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 at more than half in 1995. In conclusion, the graphic and pie chart exhibit/demonstrate that
although
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 Canada and Japan accounted for the majority of the UK’s
fish
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import
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 trade, and the market was expanding, the international competition was still very stiff/tough/fierce in the past ten
years
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(1990–2000)/from 1990 to 2000.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words import, fish, years with synonyms.
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