Claim: When planning courses, educators should take into account the interests and suggestions of their students. Reason: Students are more motivated to learn when they are interested in what they are studying. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is

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that
educators
should take into consideration
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students
' opinions, which is based on the reason that
students
can be more involved in classes and result in
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in efficiency is a complex one. In my point of view,
while
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students
and make moderate adjustments
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current teaching methods, it is
also
necessary to ensure
students
are not taking
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by only learning the ones they prefer, but
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understanding
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preferred
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and making inquiries for opinions in advance can help
educators
with providing
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more suitable and efficient education.
For instance
, a questionnaire can be designed to find out what kind of learning style
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students
prefer, or what kind of topics are more unfamiliar which requires more materials
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for better understanding, and
also
, to give some blank spaces for any suggestions that can be helpful. By implementing practices based on the
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gathered earlier,
educators
then
can present a better education.
On the other hand
, It is worth
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that over-satisfying the requests from
students
can result in
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imbalance in presenting
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comprehensive learning content.
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, too
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activities in class can potentially limit the time
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discussing other
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.
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certain aspects of knowledge and practices are excessively performed, other aspects of the contents and
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are less emphasized, or even not neglected. The responsibility of every educator is to ensure
students
receive
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with impartiality.
To sum up
, I agree with the claim that teachers should be looking into the
opinion
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of the
students
to perform better educational
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. By integrating the
feedbacks
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feedback
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,
educators
then
can increase the willingness
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students
to participate and have higher
engagements
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which can result in better learning performance.
However
, it is
also
necessary to draw the line from over-emphasizing
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from
students
. Any adjustments should
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for the increase of efficiency or interests, rather than sacrificing other
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content
which is as important as any other ones.
Educators
should strike a balance between these two factors to execute a comprehensive educational strategy.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on strengthening your logical structure. While you have a clear introduction and conclusion, try to develop your arguments in a more organized manner. Consider using topic sentences and clearly delineating your main points to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
Ensure that every part of the essay contributes to the argument or provides a relevant and clear idea. Avoid including minor errors and gaps in reasoning. For example, improve the clarity of the second paragraph by linking your example more directly to the topic sentence.
Task Achievement
Include more specific, relevant examples to support your argument. The examples provided are somewhat vague and could be made more concrete to better illustrate your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Review grammar and syntax to minimize errors. Punctuation and sentence structure can be refined to improve the overall readability, for instance, ensuring that sentences are properly segmented with commas and conjunctions.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and presents a balanced view of the issue. It recognizes the importance of considering students' opinions while also maintaining the educator's responsibility to deliver comprehensive content.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and offers a clear stance. It reiterates the balance that educators must strike between accommodating students' interests and ensuring a well-rounded education.

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