You have borrowed something from your friend and it has got damaged. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter, • apologize for damaging the product/stuff • explain what happened • say how are you going to fix the issue

#friend #product #stuff

Hello my friend I hope you are doing well. I'm so sorry about your

book

which you took the new one. If you remember I took a

book

from you for preparing an exam. Tomorrow I wanted to give back it to you but it was torn by accident.

I'm really regret

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I really regret

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for

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apply

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this

. I will explain

this

event to you in detail. When I was reading

book

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a book

the book

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, the housephone rang and I went to answer it.

Then

my sister entered my room

for playing

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to play

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and she accidentally tore it. She is only 3 years old that's why she didn't know what she was doing. I hope you will try to understand my situation. I don't want to get you down,so I'm going to sort out with problem by bringing a new

book

to you. I hope you won't

upset

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be upset

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and forgive me . See you soon Best wishes Sarvinoz 😊

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greeting and closing

Consider using more formal language, such as 'Dear [Friend's Name],' instead of 'Hello my friend'.

single idea per paragraph

Ensure each paragraph develops a single main idea more clearly. For instance, focus the second paragraph solely on explaining what happened.

complete response

You have clearly addressed all parts of the prompt, including an apology, an explanation, and a solution.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is appropriately apologetic and friendly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

151 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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