The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003
The two charts illustrate the phenomenon which is the proportion and frequency of going to the cinema by different aged people during
the
1995-2003.They Change the article
apply
were
both show Unnecessary verb
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a
similar Correct article usage
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growing
and Replace the word
growth
declining
with some minor differences.
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decline
Frist
, the percentage of Correct your spelling
First
population
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the population
visit
to the cinema grew steadily before 2003, except Correct pronoun usage
who visit
the
1997-1999, Change the article
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maintain
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maintained
smooth
. Change the word
smoothly
By contrast
, a steady decrease has been
recorded in Wrong verb form
was
the
2003. The percentage was only 4% higher than Change the article
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initial
data. Meanwhile, the Correct article usage
the initial
overall
trend of average
number of cinema visits was upward, but there have been periods when the data decreased sharply Change the article
an average
the average
in1999
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in 1999
at
around 4 times.
In the meantime, the period starting in 1995, the average number of different age groups experienced some fluctuations, ranging from a low of 8 to a high of 11 by 2003. Change preposition
by
Subsequently
, there was a notable drop in the figures for both sets of reasons. Each aged
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age
groups
reached its lowest point in Fix the agreement mistake
group
this
period. It was worth mentioned
that the groups under 35 Change the form of the verb
mentioning
were
reached the same number of 10 by 2003.
In conclusion, Unnecessary verb
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Although
there were minor fluctuations, the overall
information stayed relatively constant throughout several years. Something may be
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have
happen
between 1997Wrong verb form
happened
-
1999.Correct word choice
and
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