The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of five different devices and appliances owned by American families between 1995 to 1999.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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most households are intrigued by using washing machines;
however
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, they are not interested in both DVD players and the Internet.
To begin
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with, the fraction of washing machines started at 60% and slightly increased to well under 70% in 1996 before levelling off around
this
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level for one
year
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. A moderate rise was seen from 1997 to 1999 and it arrived at a gigantic 80% in the final
year
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.
Furthermore
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, computers which was 40% in 1995 surged to a massive 70% in 1999;
besides
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, mobile phones began at roughly a nominal 18% and skyrocketed to an enormous 85% in the
last
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year
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. What is interesting to note is that the ratio of phones was less than washing machines by 3 times in the first
year
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.
Additionally
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, the DVD players percentage was 25% in 1995 and dramatically nosedived to a meagre 15% in 1996;
as well as
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soared to 40% in 1999.
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, the Internet, which was a minuscule 10% in
year
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one, jumped and surpassed the former to 50% in the
last
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year
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. What is surprising to see is that both of them had the same per cent during 1997 and 1998.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Households
  • Technology adoption
  • Growth rate
  • Decline rate
  • Milestones
  • Obsolete
  • Societal factors
  • Economic conditions
  • Advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Market saturation
  • Trend analysis
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