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In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced ocally. Why people buy imported food? what could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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In modern life, lots of
people
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 tend to buy imported
food
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 rather than
food
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 produced in their country. Imported
food
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 is very good for
people
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 to use because of
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 a new flavor
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 provides many vitamins and minerals.
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, the
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also
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 encourage citizens to buy local
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 with not only
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many special prices but
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good quality. The primary reason is that imported
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 can accept all of
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 of customers with different shapes
especially
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 the new flavour. Many types of imported
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,
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also
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 provide lots of necessary nutrients for the body's human to keep fit.
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,
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 can buy imported fruit and vegetables all the time they need and eat them without waiting for the season.
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, in Viet Nam, the trend of buying some fruits
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 as apples, kiwi and cherries which are imported from
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European countries
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 having suitable prices with good quality and the company
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 has a good advertisement in the supermarket to attract
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 to buy it.
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,
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people
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 only focus on buying imported
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 , their country will go down significantly
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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 field.
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, the
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 should solve
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 problem by encouraging
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 to use local
food
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. They can create "black Friday" with many special prices or some fruit events to introduce traditional fruits to foreign tourists and local
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 to try. It will be effective if the
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 choose to organize in the city centre. In conclusion, eating imported
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 will bring many benefits for consumers.
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 that, the
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 should make local
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 becomes popular to encourage
people
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 to buy it.

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task achievement
Develop your points further with detailed explanations and more specific examples to make your argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical accuracy and sentence construction to ensure clarity and correctness.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This is fundamental for any good essay.
task achievement
Your essay effectively highlights the reasons why people choose imported food and also suggests ways to promote local food, addressing both parts of the task.
task achievement
The examples used, such as the trend in Viet Nam, help to illustrate your points well and add context to your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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