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The table below shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006.

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006.
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The given table below illustrates worldwide mobile phone sales data in 2005 and 2006. We can clearly see that Nokia has been leading the industry as always. BenQ Mobile has been
at the end
 of the list. First of all, other brands had 19.2 per
cent
 in 2005, but it decreased to 16.2 per
cent
 in 2006 .
Next
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 brand
is
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 always
lasted
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BenQ Mobile.
L.G
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L.G.
 had 6.7 per
cent
 marketing share in 2005, but dropped to 6.3 per
cent
 in 2006.
That is
 why; Sony Ericsson passed L.G by 1.2 per
cent
. Samsung started with 12.7 per
cent
 in 2005 and
end
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ended
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 with 11.8 per
cent
 in 2006. Motorola had 17.7 per
cent
 in 2005
,
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 and increased to 21.1 per
cent
 in 2006.
To sum up
, Nokia had 32.5 per
cent
 in 2005 and climbed up to 35 per
cent
 in 2006. Nokia has been bigger than other marketing share in both 2005 and 2006.
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