Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals believe that crime is
due to
uncontrollable situations,
while
others think it is because of the normal development of those
people
. I think circumstances can make
people
more prone to
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criminal actions. Both points of view
along with
my opinion will be
further
explained in
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To begin
with, living in
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area with
poor
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monthly salary can be very challenging
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many
people
. To explain more, living with
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of money
due to
,
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salary will make
people
live in low quality of
life
.
Therefore
, some individuals tend to
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crimes and steal
banks
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, because they believe that the only way to live
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a
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life
with money is to do so. A prime example, in Japan, university students conducted a survey among prison residences and it revealed that the main reason
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criminal actions
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their need to live in high standard
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.
Hence
, the need for money and
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life
is the
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for
people
to do criminal activities, and
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their standard of living.
Nevertheless
, the psychological
developments
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development
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of humans is complex, and it starts from day one after the child is born. children’s brain growth and structure
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variable from one another, and even their response to outer circumstances is different.
In other words
, some
people
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normal psychological developments lead to the growing of criminal thoughts in their
brain
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.
For example
, The
university
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of Arizona conducted a study a long USA prisons revealed that
,
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people
with criminal records have
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no evidence of psychological disorders.
In addition
, the study showed that they are normal.
Thus
, individuals are bad because they are originally in their normal development.
To conclude
, after the above-mentioned points,
being
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some with criminal records are far away from what is
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in someone’s
life
.
However
, I think the need to live a decent
life
may drive some
people
to
attend doing
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crimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic circumstances
  • poverty
  • lack of education
  • unemployment
  • illegal activities
  • desperation
  • social issues
  • exposure to violence
  • family structures
  • inherent
  • personality traits
  • lack of empathy
  • aggression
  • predilection for risk-taking
  • affluent backgrounds
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