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Some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them.Other people say believe its good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss boths views and give your own opinion

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Friends
 play a crucial role in our
life
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, as we spend a great deal with them. For some
individuals
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 it is better to communicate with someone who all the time has
the
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similar opinions rather than with the humankind who has a disagreement view. I will discuss some pros and cons of
chosen
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choosing
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 different
type
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types
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 of
friend
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friends
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.
One
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On
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 the one hand there are many factors why it is valuable to have
friends
 with the same opinion.
For instance
, he
imagine
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 himself in the situation as you and can help you faster.
In addition
 to
this
, having equal opinions with your friend can avoid conflict, so your friendship may lost for
long
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.
On the other hand
,
since
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having disagreements on some topics would lead to
discussion
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 between
friends
 and develop intellectual level.
Moreover
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 a friend with
different
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a different
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 view informs you
from
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 negative consequences.
However
 strong disagreement can often ruin friendship. In conclusion, I believe that people should have a good mix of
friends
 who
has
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have
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 diverse opinions. Personally, I think that we should select
friends
 who sometimes have contrasting visions to ours as it benefits us more.
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You should work on providing more relevant and specific examples to support your main ideas. This can help in making your arguments stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to maintain a logical structure throughout your essay. Some points appear somewhat fragmented at times.
task achievement
Try to avoid using vague phrases like 'some individuals' and 'humankind.' Instead, aim for clearer, more precise language.
coherence cohesion
Consider revising certain awkward or unclear phrases, such as 'avoid conflict, so your friendship may lost for long.' Improving these areas will enhance the clarity of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, helping the reader understand your stance on the topic.
task achievement
You have approached the topic by discussing both views, which shows a balanced perspective.

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