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The provided flowchart illustrates the growing of pineapples and derivative products which are created by pineapple.

#flowchart #pineapples #products #pineapple
Overall
, it is clearly observed that
pineapples
 need some natural resources and chemicals to grow.
In addition
, those are given growth to different products. In terms of cultivated
method
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methods
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, the production of
pineapples
 starts by growing in three different sizes including small,
medium
, and large. Each size of pineapple needs a distance of 26
centimeters
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centimetres
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. For a small one, it needs sun rays around 23 to 30 degrees.
Meanwhile
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 in the
medium
 size, it takes seven months.
In addition
, the large apples need additional substances
such
 as
etahline
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tagline
etching
 substances for five months, resulting in 30
centimeters
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centimetres
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 high and 2
killograms
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kilograms
. Turning to the process product, all sizes of
pineapples
 are cleaned
by
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 running water beforehand before they are divided into three sections. The small and
medium
pineapples
 are peeled by a knife to separate the core and the skin
which
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then
 the small ones are extracted by an extractor to create pineapple juices
while
 the
medium
 one is cut into pieces and canned. At the same time, the larger ones are preserved by wax before they are contained in a large basket and distributed by
cargoes
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.
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introduction conclusion present
You have provided a clear and concise introduction and overview, summarizing the main stages of pineapple growing and product creation. Try to add a concluding sentence to further enhance the completeness of your essay.
logical structure
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and flows logically to the next. Try to enhance the logical structure by linking your ideas more cohesively.
supported main points
Support your main points with additional specific examples or details to illustrate the stages of pineapple production more comprehensively.
complete response
The essay provides a complete description of the processes involved in growing pineapples and their derivative products, showing good task achievement.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction is clear and sets the stage for the rest of the essay, making it easy to follow.
clear comprehensive ideas
You used appropriate terminology to describe the pineapple cultivation and product creation processes, which demonstrates a good command of relevant vocabulary.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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