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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The illustration provides information about the percentage of
coffee
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 and tea which were bought and the drinking habits of people in five cities in Australia in the
last
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 month.
Overall
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, it can be seen that fresh
coffee
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 was the most popular item among citizens of Melbourn and
Sydney
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,
while
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 instant
coffee
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 was the most popular with people of Brisbane and
Hobart
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. In terms of serving in café, the people of Melbourne and
Hobart
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 took the lead. Looking at the details, it appears that fresh
coffee
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 was sold in Melbourne in the highest amount of all, at about 64%, followed by
Hobart
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 and
Sydney
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, with approximately 63% and 61% respectively.
Additionally
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, citizens of
Hobart
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 take the lead in purchasing instant
coffee
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, at around 54%,
whereas
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Sydney
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 had the least interested population, at just above 45%. In terms of attending café,
Hobart
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 and Melbourne were the most popular cities in Australia, at about 64% and 63% respectively, nearly followed by
Sydney
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, with 61% of the population.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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