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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.
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The line graph gives data on the
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amount
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number
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 of
people
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 per
million
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 visiting four museums from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
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, the chart indicates that
while
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 both the Louvre and Vatican
Museum
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 exhibited an increment, there are notable variations to the extent, on the one hand, the visits to the London Science
Museum
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 showed a reverse pattern, and Shenzhen had quite a linear
amount
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 of
guests
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. Looking specifically at the number of visits to the Louvre, which had the highest
amount
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 of attention. The
museum
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 began with a little below 8
million
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people
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, and rose slightly to around 9
million
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 in 1995, but
then
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 saw a slight dip to about 8.5
million
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people
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 five years later, from
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, the
museum
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 saw a gradual influx of
guests
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, reaching a peak of approximately 9.2
million
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 by the end of the season.
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, the Vatican
Museum
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 received nearly 4.3
million
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guests
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initially
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,
then
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 experienced a steady
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 of
people
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 reaching its highest level of about 9
million
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people
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, coming in a close second to Louvre
guests
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. Regarding the visitors of the London Science
Museum
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 and Shenzhen
Museum
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, the London Science
Museum
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 started with exactly 4,000,000
people
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this
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 figure plateaued for the first five years
then
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 depleted significantly accounting for half its initial
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, and becoming the least centre of attraction.
On the other hand
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, Shenzhen was just under 4
million
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 in 1980,
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 was reduced by about 1
million
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 in 2000, when it rose back to its initial
amount
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, people, million, museum, guests with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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