You are going for a one-week vacation and your friend agreed to stay at your place while you are away. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, you should: thank her/him and tell the dates of your holiday explain how he/she enters the house describe what you expect him/her to do.

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Dear Maninder, I hope
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letter finds you in radiant health and best of the spirits. I am writing
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letter to thank you for accepting my request
of staying
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to stay

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at my place in my absence. I am going on a family holiday from 22 to 28 August. I have
few
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a few

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instruction
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instructions

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for you regarding the entry inside the house.
Firstly
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, use code 4325 for
main
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the main

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door lock and code 5671 to switch off the security alarm.
Secondly
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, after entering the house switch on useful electronic appliances like water
purifier
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purifiers

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and wireless
device
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devices

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. My puppy will be waiting for you, kindly feed him . I will keep his food on
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the dinning

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dinning
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dining

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table for your ease. Adding more, take the puppy for a morning walk as he loves it.
Lastly
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, check the mailbox regularly for any important posts. I hope you will have a
pleasent
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pleasant

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stay and don't hesitate to call me in case of any emergency. Thanking you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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language
Ensure consistent use of the word 'code' – instances such as 'use code 4325' can be changed to 'use the code 4325' for better clarity.
content
While the main tasks were covered, adding a personal touch or expressing consideration for your friend’s convenience might enhance the letter.
greeting
The greeting and closing of the letter were warm and appropriate, setting a friendly tone.
structure
The letter has a logical structure, with each paragraph addressing a specific aspect of the instructions.
tone
The writing tone is polite and suitable for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Appreciate
  • Grateful
  • House-sit
  • Trust
  • Holiday
  • Dates
  • Entering','Instructions
  • Security
  • Expectations
  • Take care
  • Pet
  • Watering plants
  • Collect mail
  • Maintain cleanliness
  • Potential issues
  • Conclude
  • Confidence
  • Reciprocate
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