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SOME SAYFREE EDUCATIONSOME PEOPLE THINK THAT GOVERNMENT SHOULD PROVIDE FREE EDUCATION AT EVERY LEVEL. HOWEVER, SOME SAY THAT INDIVIDUALS SHOULD PAY FOR THEIR UNIVERSITY EDUCATION. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
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 period of inflation, it has long been a topic of debate
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whether
 the government should provide free
education
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 for students at all levels or should it be the sole responsibility of the
parents
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. In my opinion, the former proposition i:e, the
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government
 should be providing free and quality
education
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 for all pupils at all levels is more rational.
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 elaborate my views for favoring positive impact and
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, will lead to a logical conclusion. Analysing the statement and explaining
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, the first and foremost reason behind
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 is that
education
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 nowadays
are
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 becoming more expensive making it a real challenge for
parents
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 to
be providing
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 it to all their
kids
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,
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forcing
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 families to
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education
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 in their families.
According to
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 a recent
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survey
 by the Australian government, 65% of students drop out of formal
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 as it is unaffordable. Probing ahead, one of the main
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 to support my view stems from the point that
education
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 today has turned into a serious mode of business, forcing
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 and
its
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 infrastructure to be more appealing to
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both
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 teachers and
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 alike so as to be at the epitome of the list, resulting in the spiked
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tuition
 fees. To add
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, schools today have become a
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 of social status symbol too, where
parents
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 take pride in showing
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the world that their
kids
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 go to the most expensive schools in the locality. In conclusion to the arguments aforementioned above, one can conclude that governments
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 to fund
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to
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kids
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 as it will not just keep a bar on the
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tuition
 fees but
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 encourage
parents
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 to send their
kids
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 for higher
education
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.
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Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and free from typographical errors to make your essay easier to read and more professional.
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Introduce more specific examples and data to further substantiate your points, rather than relying on general statements.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly supports or refutes either of the views discussed in the essay prompt; sometimes, the reasoning could be more focused.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear and concise introduction that states the author’s position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the discussion and reiterates the author’s stance.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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