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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graph illustrates the transformation of ownerships of different electrical equipment and how long they
used
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 for domestic purposes in one particular country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, it can be seen apparently that all
type
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types
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 of electric appliances experienced an upward trend throughout the period,
whereas
 there was a downward trend in the number of
hours
 doing the
house works
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housework
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.
According to
 the period of work, people spent their
times
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time
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 in household activities for 50
hours
 per week in
initial
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the initial
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 year,
then
 the figure decreased significantly
more
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 than
a
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half to 20
hours
 in
next
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the next
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 four decades.
Subsequently
, the figure continually fell to 10
hours
, in 2019. Turning to the first graph, a washing machine had 40% of
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the household
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household
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households
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which
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possessed
this
 power tool, in 1920, before the number
increasing
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 continually to 70% forty years later. Afterwards, it dropped slightly to around 65%,
1980
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in 1980
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,
then
 rose to just above 70% in the final year. Meanwhile, there was only 30% for vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 in the beginning, which eventually climbed sharply to a peak and steadily remained over the period.
Additionally
,
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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 had nearly 0% in the first year
then
 went up dramatically to 90%, in 1960, before rising gradually to 100% and stayed at
this
 level until the end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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