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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food resturants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food resturants between 2003 and 2013.
The given bar chart illustrates how often Americans visited
fast
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fast-food
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food
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restaurants
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 between 2003 and 2013.
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, it is evident that the majority of American
individuals
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 opted to dine at fast
food
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restaurants
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 on a weekly or bi-monthly basis,
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 the percentages of
individuals
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day or never consumed it were relatively low. Clearly, the proportion of
individuals
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 who consumed fast
food
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 on a weekly basis varied throughout the 10-year period, with a peak of 33% in 2006. The percentage of
individuals
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 who visited fast
food
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restaurants
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 once or twice a month
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 fluctuated, reaching a high of 33% in 2013. The figure for going to fast
food
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restaurants
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 several times a week came
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with its highest point of 20% in 2006. Customers dining at fast
food
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restaurants
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 a few times a year showed a slight increase until 2013 (15%).  It is interesting that the percentages of
individuals
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 who visited the establishment on a daily basis and those who never consumed fast
food
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 exhibited similar downward trends during the same time frame. In 2013, these percentages decreased to approximately 3% and 4%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurants, individuals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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