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the bar chart shows the number of homes, each worth 5 million dollars or more, sold in eight countries.

the bar chart shows the number of homes, each worth 5 million dollars or more, sold in eight countries.
The given bar chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
houses
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 which were sold with a value of
five
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million
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 US or over in eight distinctive nations between 2009 and 2014. generally speaking, the data reveals that the
number
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 of
houses
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 sold for over
five
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million
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 dollars increased in most cities except Singapore by 2009 compared to 2014.
However
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, the
number
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 of
houses
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 sold in London was the highest from
beginning
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the beginning
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 to the end. The analysis shows that selling
houses
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 with a cost of over
five
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million
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 US was chiefly given to Longdon and the
number
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 remained the highest throughout the period, which was at 523 apartments in 2009, and
then
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 increased to 1638
homes
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 in 2014. Meanwhile, the figure of
homes
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 sold in Dubai, Los Angeles and Miami all had a slight increase
smilarly
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similarly
 from 12 to 46, 178 to 214 and 256 to 312
houses
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 in that order over a
five
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-year span. Moving on to the
number
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 of
homes
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 sold for more than
five
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million
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 US in Hong Kong and New York, both figures rose dramatically from 388 to 597 and 476 to 796 respectively between 2009 and 2014
while
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 the
number
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 of
homes
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 sold in Sydney went up quietly (151 to 258).
By contrast
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, the period of amount of
houses
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 sold in Singapore decreased slightly by about 33
houses
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 from 107 to 74 after
five
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 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, five, million, number, homes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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