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The given table compares the spending level of the government on education and participation level of youngsters in five countries in 2002.

The given table compares the spending level of the government on education and participation level of youngsters in five countries in 2002.
The given table compares the spending
level
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 of the government on
education
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 and
participation
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the participation
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level
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 of youngsters in five
countries
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 in 2002.
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, the highest percentage of spending money
in
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on
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education
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level
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 was in Slovenia rather than
other
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in other
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countries
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.
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,
Poland
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 despite
of
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apply
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the lowest
level
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in
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of
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 learning, showed the highest
level
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in
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of
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 engagement
level
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 . In all the
countries
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, teenagers spent the highest proportion of their budget on engagement
rate
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. In
Poland
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, the total spending of
youngers
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young people
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in
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on
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education
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 was slightly lower compared to the other
countries
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 about 5%, but in participation
rate
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 moistured more than in
othe
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the
other
 four
countries
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 at 44%. In
Czech
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the Czech
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 Republic,
learning
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the learning
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rate
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 accounts for 9%, which is marginally greater than
thatin
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that in
that
Poland
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.
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, the training
level
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 in the Czech Republic stood at approximately 27%. In
Romania
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, the expenditure
rate
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 stood at around 10%, which is twice as high as that in
Poland
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 and
participation
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the participation
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rate
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 in
Romania
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, at 23%, was slightly lower compared to that in the Czech Republic. In Hungary, the
education
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 expenditure
rate
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 stood at 13%, slightly exceeding that of
Romania
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.
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, the attendance
rate
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 in Hungary, approximately 34%, surpassed that of
Romania
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.
By contrast
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, in Slovenia, the
education
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 expenditure
rate
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 reached the highest
level
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 at around 25%, surpassing that of other
countries
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.
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, the attendance
rate
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 stood at 40%, slightly exceeding that of Hungary.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, education, countries, poland, rate, romania with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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