An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •Recommend the best time of year to visit and why •Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose •Say what you would like to show your friend in your country
Dear Janda,
I was pleased to hear that you’re going to visit Brisbane, so I’m writing to give you some information to think about before you come.
Most people travel to Brisbane in the summer months, but I think it’s uncomfortably hot at that time of the year. Autumn is the best season, between April and June. It’s still sunny, but much cooler than in summer.
At the moment, all our bedrooms are full, so unfortunately, we can’t put you up.
However
, there are some cheap places to stay, like Airbnb’s, in our suburb. You could also
stay in a serviced apartment in the city centre or on the Gold Coast. There are lots of specials online, so I’m sure you’ll find somewhere affordable.
When you get here, let me be your tourist guide. I’ll take you to Lone Pine Koala Sanctuary, where you can feed kangaroos and koalas. I can also
drive you to the Gold Coast for a swim. To add excitement, we can visit the theme parks there too.
When you get here, let me be your tourist guide. I’ll take you to Lone Pine Koala Sanctuary, where you can feed kangaroos and koalas. I can also
drive you to the Gold Coast for a swim. To add excitement, we can visit the theme parks there too.
Best wishes,
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task response
The letter successfully addresses all parts of the task: recommending the best time to visit, describing accommodation options, and sharing plans for activities. However, there's a duplicated paragraph that should be removed to improve the logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter to avoid repetition and maintain a logical flow. Removing duplicated paragraphs ensures smoother reading.
task response
The letter has a very friendly and appropriate tone throughout, which suits the purpose well.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are well-structured, each addressing a single idea, which enhances readability.
coherence cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are well-executed, creating a cohesive start and finish.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite