The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The diagram below illustrates the steps of
process
how making Add an article
the process
sugar
from sugar
cane.
Overall
, it can be seen in those seven stages. Starting from Growing sugar
cane that is
about 12 to 18 being mature and the last
process
is Drying and cooling.
Look at details, The first step is
Growing which is sugar
canes
developing about 12 to 18 months before it will be mature, The Fix the agreement mistake
cane
next,
Harvesting which is two methods which are Manual and mechanical. The manual is a farmer chopping sugar
canes
and leaves. Meanwhile, the mechanic is using Fix the agreement mistake
cane
machine
to chop Add an article
a machine
the machine
sugar
canes
.
Following the Fix the agreement mistake
cane
process
. The machine can be Crush
Correct your spelling
crushed sugar
Sugar
canes
which extract the Juice, which is later purified juice using a limestone filter. In the next step, The Juice is heated using an Evaporator and it becomes syrup. Then
process
Centrifuge which separates sugar
crystal from syrup. The last
step is drying and cooling which is making sugar
that of ready to consume.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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