The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The diagram below illustrates the steps of
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how making Add an article
the process
sugar
from Use synonyms
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cane.
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Overall
, it can be seen in those seven stages. Starting from Growing Linking Words
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cane Use synonyms
that is
about 12 to 18 being mature and the Linking Words
last
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is Drying and cooling.
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The first step is
Growing which is Linking Words
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canes
developing about 12 to 18 months before it will be mature, The Fix the agreement mistake
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next,
Harvesting which is two methods which are Manual and mechanical. The manual is a farmer chopping Linking Words
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canes
and leaves. Meanwhile, the mechanic is using Fix the agreement mistake
cane
machine
to chop Add an article
a machine
the machine
sugar
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canes
.
Following the Fix the agreement mistake
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process
. The machine can be Use synonyms
Crush
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crushed sugar
Sugar
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canes
which extract the Juice, which is later purified juice using a limestone filter. In the next step, The Juice is heated using an Evaporator and it becomes syrup. Use synonyms
Then
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Centrifuge which separates Use synonyms
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crystal from syrup. The Use synonyms
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step is drying and cooling which is making Linking Words
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that of ready to consume.Use synonyms
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