The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table shows the percentages of information about the different ways to use mobile
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by the owners in a developing country within a period of 4 years, commencing from 2006.
Overall
, The highest rate of using mobile
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can be
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observed
for Making calls in 2006 and 2008
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can be seen for Recording
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in 2008. Make calls
was
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recorded 100 in 2006 and 2008
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was the most popular reason to use
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then
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decreased by 1 per cent in 2010 to get to 99. the
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rate of utilizing
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was recorded for Record video at 9 in 2008 and
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10 times lower than Make calls in 2008. the rate of using cell
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for Paly games was 17 in 2006
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amount was a third times lower than in 2008 and 2010. Search the Internet and Record video was not have enough data in 2006
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categories was recorded in 2010, 73 and 35, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequent
  • activity
  • contrast
  • significantly
  • prevalent
  • speculate
  • trend
  • pattern
  • implication
  • develop
  • accessible
  • mobile-friendly
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