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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph here illustrates
people
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traveling
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travelling
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 to a Caribbean
island
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as well as
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 where they stayed in
seven
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seven-year
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year
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 span, from 2010 to 2017. The
number
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 of visitors is counted in millions.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of tourists has increased from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 following an upward trend with a sharp rise in the
year
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 in 2017. In
case
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the case
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 of their accommodation, it
also
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 showed an upward trend,
however
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, their progress was different from 2011 to 2016. The total
number
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 of
travellars
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travellers
 was 1
million
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 in the
year
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of
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apply
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2010, almost 80% of which stayed on the
island
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. In the following
years
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years,
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 the tourists
number
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 increased constantly
untill
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until
 2016.
On the other hand
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, the
people
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 staying on the
island
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remaind
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remained
remains
remain
same
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the same
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 in the
year
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of
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apply
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2011. In 2012 and 2013, their
number
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 increased significantly, reaching 1.5
million
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 which
maintained
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was maintained
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 till 2015. In 2016 there
is
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was
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 a sudden drop in the
number
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 of
people
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 staying on the
island
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, but spiked to 1.5
million
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 in 2017
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, around a quarter of a
million
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people
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 stayed on cruise ships in 2010, which jumped to half a
million
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 in 2011. But the graph dropped in 2012. From 2012 to 2017 the
number
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 constantly
improving
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improved
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, reaching 2
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, island, year, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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