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The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied maps illustrate the schedule of changes in the basement of a
library
 between 2001 and 2009. A glance at the picture reveals that the ground floor experienced a lot of various construction and
also
 development over the period. In 2001,there were
Entrance
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 and Stairs in the south and southeast of the area,respectively and they remained unchanged in 2009.
Similarly
,the Librarian's Desk levelled off over the period.
Moreover
,there did not use to be network facilities in the basement of
library
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the library
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 in 2001,but the manager of
library
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the library
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 introduced some computers next to the Stairs in 2009.Another striking change is the transformation of the Newspapers and Periodicals
books
 into
Films
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the Films
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 and DVDs section in 2001 and 2009,respectively. It is interesting to note that there were eight small tables in the
center
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 of the place in 2001.
However
,they were replaced by four big tables in the
center
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 of the ground floor in 2009.Another notable conversion is there did not use to be fiction,kitchen,economics and law
books
in
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 the ground floor of the
library
,but they were added in the west of the place beside the
hostiory
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history
 and
self help
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 parts in 2009.
In addition
,another significant redevelopment is there
was
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 fiction
books
 in the north of the area in 2001.Whilst,they were turned into Children's
books
 in 2009.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-service machines
  • computer stations
  • digital resources
  • book sections
  • fiction, non-fiction, reference
  • café area
  • repositioned
  • user preferences
  • management strategies
  • children's area
  • youth engagement
  • educational activities
  • meeting rooms
  • collaborative spaces
  • community events
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